part twenty five

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[(Anonymous)]

i've always wondered what meme thinks about the writers who frequent this meme

[(Anonymous)]

bnfs/nugus/wips?

[(Anonymous)]

no category in particular, anon. just people who go to memes often and have unanoned (iirc there was a thread that mentioned the names of writers who are on meme/go to meme/have once been on meme)

[(Anonymous)]

moi aussi, anon, and i'm a writer myself. good or bad, i'd be interested to know... i don't think anons could say anything about my writing that would be worse than the things i tell myself.

[(Anonymous)]

/hugs you

i'm always open to providing honest crit (good and bad) if the author is receptive so just shout me up

[(Anonymous)]

tell me what you think about 私 niyaowo
I'm up for everything

[(Anonymous)]

i've already encountered some of your writing in the past. you've written so much! i admire that. which works are you most proud of/most representative of you?

[(Anonymous)]

hehe thank you
I'm pretty confident with characterisation but I have problems with plot, prose, pm everything lol u_u

the ones I'm sorta proud of:
http://seouldout-fic.livejournal.com/95523.html
http://seouldout-fic.livejournal.com/98132.html
http://niyaowo.livejournal.com/2424.html#cutid8


my most recent one that I think is representative of a majority of my fics: http://niyaowo.livejournal.com/3216.html


thank you ❤

[(Anonymous)]

二人はともだちだよ、でも本当は。。。私はあなたを好きなの。
じょだんじゃないよ。

ㅋㅋㅋ

[(Anonymous)]

キャ〜〜
あなたは本当に可愛いいいいい
愛してるね（＾ω＾）

[(Anonymous)]

チンチンたべる？

jk ilu unnir :*

[(Anonymous)]

da but lol anon やばいよ

[(Anonymous)]

first and foremost is practise, practise, practise. which is something you've already down very well.

so i just picked memento mori (http://niyaowo.livejournal.com/2653.html#cutid1) because i love the prompt and i've read it before. some easy fixes:
- if in doubt, active voice over passive. make it snappier. passive voice is very useful in certain instances but too often it can bog down your writing.
- showing (through images, sensory information, emotions) not telling
- is each motion, facial spasm, adverb truly necessary to describe? speed it up! i know i get bogged down in the sequence of events, and every so often i have to take a step back and go NOPE. CUTTING THAT OUT. this also foregrounds the important and/or interesting parts of your narrative. careful, selective storytelling also encourages the reader to read closer and consider each sentence as they progress.

e.g. the first paragraph:

Lu Han heard the crunch of leaves below his feet The leaves crunched below Lu Han's feet and his wings disappeared into the wind. The first thing he noticed was how different Earth looked compared to a few hundred years ago. (I'd rewrite this completely: e.g. "Earth had become unrecognisable in mere centuries.") He really had slept too long this time. (show us! "The sunlight burned through the last vestiges of sleep.")

- a ctrl+f on "ly" brings up highlights everywhere. 90% of the time, a sentence that needs an adverb can be easily reworded to much greater effect. The use of terms such as "finally" and "after a moment" shows a sensitivity and rigidity in the sequence of time and also, if you find, often can be removed outright without changing the meaning of anything at all. readers aren't as sensitive as you think! although they can help in suspenseful scenes, other techniques such as using curt sentences can easily emulate that feeling.

- addendum: 'really' is weak. you want to use it in dialogue? if that is the character's voice and not your own, sure. still, try another word or cut it out entirely. economy is key. that's not to say you can't have your vivid descriptions, because if done thoughtfully you absolutely can.

- this is just a list of technicalities because you have a very strong foundation: interesting ideas, strong work ethic, a desire to improve. but technicalities are also part of the foundation! and often the most easily improved. i'll talk about these and more, including what i like, in another post.

tbc as i read the fics you've actually linked lol

[(Anonymous)]

;~; thank you anon~

what fandoms do you usually read for? just curious.

[(Anonymous)]

i have rough to detailed knowledge of all the 'main' ones except shinee and super junior. many nugus, including girl groups. to niyaowo, i'm still writing up a reply so look forward to it! :)

[(Anonymous)]

what do you mean? there are a lot of writers who go here with varying styles...

[(Anonymous)]

oops sorry, i somehow got pulled into a meeting randomly. anyway, i meant writers like niyaowo, carvone, bulletthestars, onyu, herocountry who frequent the meme. idt i've seen anons actually give them crit?

[(Anonymous)]

onyu is onew the mod, right?

[(Anonymous)]

no

[(Anonymous)]

i don't think so? she's a nugu writer iirc

[(Anonymous)]

onyu ships the same pairings as onew the mod and stans the same people so yeah i think so

[(Anonymous)]

herocountry = filterpaper = dear_whimsy, right?

[(Anonymous)]

someone confirmed this so i think yes?

[(Anonymous)]

lol too nugu for meme to care? i've always gotten that impression, speaking as a writer who frequents meme /o\

[(Anonymous)]

what fandom do you write for, nonnie? :D

and lol being a nugu has its perks tbh. it's easier to not get noticed and not get hated on lol